Chapter 5 - "I Told You"
Yeah, the phone being broken looks dumb.
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UTK 2008 Fall Film Project
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Good acting, music is suspenseful. I did notice that @ 1:56 there is some overlap of scenes.
Hmm... this doesn't seem like your regular quality of work. The acting was real weak, and it seemed much more amateurish than your usual submissions (shaking camera work, far too wide shots, awkward angles.) Music wasn't bad, but I just felt fairly confused throughout the whole thing. But hey, this is your fifth submission for the story, its gotta be getting tough to keep doing this things every week.
Okay... a few things about this submission....
1) hot girl = good
2) same set = good
3) what's with the guy in the hoody.... really bad acting = bad. He ruined the decent acting by the hottie and the other dude.
4) Lack of suspense... = bad
5) inconsistent and choppy editing... = really bad
you add all this up... = NOT top two this week even with the hot girl.
Hmm, dude acts just like Topher Grace. Awkward and terrible.
i dont get it, why did the girl fall and never get up. random heart attacks dont usually happen to hot chicks. this was dumb...
You guys definately could have spent more time on this, but I think that this was actually the best submission for suspense. 1) Who was in the car 2) What happened to the hot girl and the phone (looked like it was gone too) when they looked back over car 3) Why does the first kidnapped guy seem so worried about Oliver finding him when he looked so smug telling Annie that he would find her? Other submissions didn't leave me asking any questions because (1) (The circle of death) The gun stand off would have been suspenseful, but we already know how that ended way too quickly, and brown jacket stating that he had code seems like same type of hanging endings as other clips. Too many questions answered. (2) I already know the guy can control minds with the phone (Midnight Blue), but how did he do it if Annie has the phone? Suspenseful in the way that you don't know if they will get out, but still another hanging ending like the rest. Already know what they're dealing with. (3) Also, still too much explanation and knowledg of the plot to be suspenseful to me, but I just may not be clear on what qualifies. Did like the videography though.
Going based on story, and story only (should have made more effort during filming and editing) "I told you" gets my vote
As noted above, not great camera work, but I like your story best for suspense. Voting for you. Thought there was usually 5 submissions for your school?
Did the guy walking and getting into the jeep have anything to do with the story? Seems like it because the jeep is shown in motion in the garage, but how do you know it's the Oliver guy? Confused me, but I guess that's what it's supposed to do.
None of the entries seem to use much suspense (not in technique at least). Rootclip provided links to guidelines for your "Film-noir" submissions, but I didn't see any for the "suspense" category. I did note the "a la Hitchcock" description however and searched the web to see what I could find for Hitchcock suspense. Found this site www.borgus.com/think/hitch.htm that gives a pretty good outline of how to produce a Hitchcock-esque film. Are these students given guidelines to follow before they are sent to create these stylistic assignments? I've chosen AgainstTheClock's submission only because it has left me desiring more of an explanation, and after reading Pack's comment I replayed the clip and realized that the female definately is missing when they raise up from the car (you needed to make that more clear with a closer shot perhaps). So although the style didn't fit Hitchcock suspense. I would like to see how the story unfolds from this entry.
It will definately be interesting to read the judge's comments.
After reviewing comments left on each group's submission page I've noticed the harsh criticisms left for each group. The highest number of verbal assault's is on Dusome's page. I've viewed the profiles for these commentators. The most disparaging comments left on Dusome's page (CCC, wastoass, and gagglegeeses) have only voted for TeamBlackRock each time. In correlation, TeamBlackRock's page has irritable comments left by members that have only voted for Dusome each time. Additionally, these voting members have been exchanging jabs at each other via continuous comments. Some negative commentary has been placed on pages by RenderThis, but they've offered constructive criticism instead of pure insult. Not sure why Dusome and TeamBlackRock's fans or members have felt the need to belittle the other's work, but it reflects poorly on these two groups. A RenderThis sole voter chose to deprecate other entries on the RenderThis page. This is undesirable as well. My belief is that commentary should offer suggestion/constructive criticism. All three team's have accomplished desirable submissions, but unacceptable verbal communication. My vote will only be extended to AgainstTheClock not just because of the decent entry, but for appearing to be the only team that does not have friends/members that demean their competitors.