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Chapter 6 - "An Acceptable Loss"

Voting ended 5/29/2009

Chapter 6 - "An Acceptable Loss"

Submitted 5/24/2009 by BohemianFilmCommune
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The final chapter...

Credits

  • Ben - Eric Raum
  • Mike - Justin Rutan
  • Man - Bo Davis
  • "You" - Catchpenny
  • additional music - Kevin Macleod

Scoring

Weighted Community Vote Weighted Judges' Vote Total Score
22.9%
+
30.0%
=
52.9%

Judges' Votes

Alan Lastufka | YouTuber and Author

I vote for An Acceptable Loss. Great story telling and camera work, very tight editing, all around great submission.


Libby Sherrill | Documentary Filmmaker

The production value of this submission is very impressive so I'm voting for you...but I'm left wondering what is or who is "rose pedal" and Ben was an acceptable loss to whom? But, back to the production value. I'm loving and hating the VO. It worked and I liked it while also thinking "this is VO" not original track and it's not matching the jaw movement from over shoulder shot. Why did you choose that route? Was it stylistic or because you were short on mics for good sound?

You guys really have a great eye and style going for you. I've seen many a movie that didn't have as good a direction. I definitely recommend you develop some short scripts and get to shooting and enter festivals.

Congrats and Goodluck!


Cathy Baron | Actress

Great job you guys! I'm voting for you because your submission was so interesting to watch. The shaking effect raised the intensity of the story- nice touch ;) You guys could make a great suspense film!



Comments

5/24/2009 at 7:59 p.m. by Blichfeldt

Nice Job! Best Film to date! Has a great flow

5/25/2009 at 12:06 p.m. by JakusB

Wheres my video? =(

5/25/2009 at 4:08 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

Jakus, what was the title of it?

5/25/2009 at 4:34 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

I do hope there are 3 other videos hiding out in the ether waiting to appear...

5/25/2009 at 4:43 p.m. by davidmoon

Whoa! Where's the rest?

5/25/2009 at 4:46 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

that's what she said...sorry, tried to stop myself

5/25/2009 at 6:39 p.m. by JakusB

It's titled "The Boss". When I uploaded it, I forgot to switch over to my group's account "The Crew", so I really hope that didn't cause problems, but the rootclip guys haven't responded to me. Mine def exists, its just floating in cyberspace somewhere....

5/25/2009 at 6:54 p.m. by JGutta

where tha heck is our video rootclip...the crew posted sumthing but its not up yet!=(

5/25/2009 at 10:48 p.m. by burrsalem

Sweet work Raum.

5/26/2009 at 12:04 a.m. by jordanQ

one of the best videos on this site

5/26/2009 at 1:51 a.m. by FungusRidden

Good production values, but you really lost me in the jumble of who's crossing who and why. :/ Also, the jumps between chapters are making it harder to follow; I felt like the situation that presented itself in Chapter 5 got diffused or diverted in between here and there, and the result is a standalone that looks nice but has a flavor of detachment.

You're making your product well, but I'm not sure it's a product I want to eat. ;< Still, major kudos for putting together a really hot image, effective editing, and some strong acting.

5/26/2009 at 2:50 a.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

thanks dudes

fungus, this picks up immediately after chapter 5, what are you referring to?

5/26/2009 at 7:46 a.m. by jordanQ

although this is a very good video i am wondering what happened to jalak taka naka after the one guy ran off.

5/26/2009 at 11 a.m. by jdemeere

Jalak Taka Naka was shot 0:16 and you can see his body laying on the ground at 1:45. I do think you could have made that more obvious. The gun shot could have been louder and you see the guy drop or something but I understood what happened.

I do think Mike's voice over is a little detached but it works. I like the setting and the emotion given to the characters. It's also an ending that I think works alright.

This is clearly the winner in my view. Would like to have seen everybody get in on this but this is the won I am voting for. Good job dood!

5/26/2009 at 11:01 a.m. by jdemeere

Hehe... gotta love typos and the fact we can't edit them. Get to it rootclip! ;)

5/27/2009 at 7:08 p.m. by JGutta

this doesnt close as good as ours i dont think....dont get me wrong the shots were exellent i think ours just has a better ending for the story..

5/27/2009 at 10:19 p.m. by killerrobotninja

awesome!

5/28/2009 at 10:23 a.m. by JGutta

ahhhhh damn u guys for having such good camera and editing lmao

5/28/2009 at 1:58 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

ha, though you guys technically have a lot more money in equipment, I have an under $500 soccer-mom camera and a home built adapter :)

http://i43.tinypic.com/2lb0wo.jpg

5/28/2009 at 2:22 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

thanks jdmeere, I agree, having me be both voices was not my first choice, came off a tad cheesy, but time constraints forced my hand, glad you still dig it!

5/28/2009 at 6:11 p.m. by JakusB

Thanks Eric! I have to say, I'm veryyy jealous of your scenery. Its a very cool location. Good catch on my saying "action." I totally missed that. Was it just me, or was this a really difficult story to finish up? I wish my submission could have been longer, but I simply didn't have the time. We had a one hour time frame to shoot our video, and only a day to edit. That sort of limitations cuts out a lot of the usual time I take for proper camera setup and the 1,000 takes I like to do. Good luck to you!

5/28/2009 at 8:59 p.m. by FungusRidden

Hey, my bad; I really lost track of what was going on at the end of Rockness's. You're right, this one picks right up. I missed the terrorist completely the first time I watched this, which also shook up my perception of what was happening.

Thanks for pointing that out; I definitely retract my statement about continuity. This does continue right on from Chapter 5.

5/29/2009 at 9:43 a.m. by JGutta

yea thts quite the set up u have going on there lol, well i deffinitly give u props cuz the video was put together VERY well for a camera like that...... well i guess all i have to say is let the best man win..itll deffinitly be a close one=)...u guys are deffinitly good at what you do

5/29/2009 at 12:09 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

Thanks you guys (gals). Libby, yes, the VO was definitely not my first choice, I cringe everytime I hear it! I was on a very limited schedule and and had to do it myself instead of have my buddy redo his voice. I appreciate the feedback and I hope to find the time to make something longer than 3 minutes soon!

5/29/2009 at 12:14 p.m. by jdemeere

Congrats!

5/29/2009 at 2:27 p.m. by JakusB

Congrats dude. You def deserved this. I hope I'll be seeing you again in the next story ;).

5/29/2009 at 3:52 p.m. by killerrobotninja

it's about freakin time. Great job guys!

5/29/2009 at 4:22 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

thanks dudes!

6/1/2009 at 9:24 a.m. by JGutta

congrats guys.....we'll be seein yah in the next story...maybe we'll get ya this time =)

6/1/2009 at 9:24 a.m. by JGutta

CATHY BARON i have a signed picture of u!!!!....ya cudnt vote for me lmao=)

6/2/2009 at 7:36 a.m. by Blichfeldt

That's Right! Great Job Eric!

6/4/2009 at 11:17 a.m. by killerrobotninja

Is this in Iraq?

6/5/2009 at 5:01 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

Its in Kuwait, I'm here for now, its a bit tamer...in its own way. Kuwaiti drivers pose more threat than anything I saw in Iraq....almost anything...