Chapter 4 - "Sunshine All The Time Makes A Desert"
Ben finds himself thrown even deeper into the suspect events of the day.
Credits
- Ben - Eric Raum
- Mike - Justin Rutan
Scoring
Judges' Votes
Really like where this one is headed. A nice little break in the plot, you guys kept it very accessible, with essentially using just a single location.
Excellent production values, down to the quality of the makeup. I even liked your choice of music. This really felt like it was out of a film.
Looking forward to more of your submissions!
This clip gets my vote. Well directed and edited. Nice camera angles. Well told continuation of the plot.
You're submission length is 1:59 so no disqualification here! I like the change of scenery. The desert backdrop surprisingly worked for you. Shot selection and framing are good. You even went to the trouble of shooting from Ben's point of view as he wakes up on the ground. Attention to detail sure makes a difference. My favorite part is the flash back. Great edits. Audio is good. The notebook prop is a great selection for genre we're dealing with here--conspiracy theories, Da Vinci Code etc.
The middle was a little slow as we're going from shot to shot of Ben in the desert. All those cuts weren't necessary. I'd like to see a little more development in your next submission. It's a balancing act finding how much to progress the story without going to far and staying under 2 min. Maybe the ex-girlfriend should have been dead beside Ben in the desert? Or at least mentioned or alluded to. Great job overall though and good luck!
Well done, you get my pick this week! Nice clear story-telling, interesting plot direction. I appreciate that you didn't jump right in to gun fights and killing like the rest of the submissions. I think once we're at that point, the game is over. Realizing how far along we are in the arc of the entire story is important and you guys kept the suspense building as we're only in the third chapter. Also nicely acted, fun location, shot well, good work guys!
YES! Love your submission. It had an indie vibe to it that I really enjoyed. The music overlay gave it a different feel and you finished it off open ended. Good job with camera angles and the acting was great!
Comments
Very nice submission, the only thing is.... its 2:03!!! Remember the whole less than two minutes thing?
Thanks brotha! Hmm, that's weird, my source file is only 1:59, and when you first load the page, the timer says 1:59, but when you press play it switches to 2:03, must be a glitch in the tubes.
The acting was good. Camera work was ok too. Everything looks good here. I might have chosen a different voice for Mike's lines but is a pretty solid entry for sure. Your audio levels are much better on this submission then your last which is good! Oh and it is 2:03 on the nose so not sure how that will effect you. Good luck!
Hmm... actually rockness_monster's entry also says 2:03 - that would be a strange coincidence. Maybe there is something going on with their players? Mine says 1:29 before it plays then goes to 1:32. My original file is 1:29 too so you must have submitted a 2:00 min clip. Strange. I'd say you would be good or they wouldn't have posted the video to begin with. Anyway... good submission just thought I would clear that up for ya.
Quite odd, I played them both side by side and it definitely is slowed down on the site as there is a difference in pitch in the guitars/vocals. Rootclip dudes, any thoughts on this?
thanks brotha! As a musician, the out of tune guitar is driving me nuts! But its all good.
@BohemianFilmCommune we're looking into the timing issue and will keep you posted.
Always fun to see you put your artistic talent to work.
Well done! Way to take advantage of your location. :)
The song in the middle was nice; are you playing/singing? The set-up is cool, too, although I feel like we should have you making all the first chapters; I'd rather build five more off it than two. :< But we'll take what we can get.
You definitely capitalized on the location; next round NEEDS to be a Western. I want to see ten gallon hats and guns. >:O
Good acting, too. Definitely not to be overlooked within the other elements of your entry! Best of luck!
Now that I watch this again, I think I really like this story. I'm throwing you guys a vote because I could see this as a lot of fun to pick up from.
you made the perfect setting to bring the terrorists back in chapter 5 thank you so much hope you win
@erik Alright, back to 1:59! nice work
Thanks dudes, this one was quite a crack... I live in Kuwait, a state-sized country off the Persian Gulf. I wanted to hike into the desert, so I figured why not bring a camera and do a movie.. Its a long story, but I had a taxi drop me off out in the middle of nowhere then hiked out into the desert until I couldn't see any sign of life in any direction. The plan was to rendezvous back at the road at a certain time....you can see where this is going, time came, time went, no taxi....added another 15 kilometers onto my hike. As Helen Keller once said..."Life is either a daring adventure or nothing."
@fungus, pulled the guitar/vocal tracks off of ccmixter.org, highly recommend it! And dude, I would LOVE to do a western! I had planned on doing this western mini-series this summer but ended up out of the country...now I'm actually by a desert, perfect!
Incredible! Your stuff is best! Let's get ya a win!
i like this. you not supposed to wear jeans or it is only chapter 2 that count? i see another entry with no jeans.
yeah, I realized once I got out there the jeans hadn't made it into my bag...or maybe Mike changed Ben's pants on the way....probably not though
(man, I used a forbidden character again! Mods, please delete the "empty" comment and this paragraph)
Really, really cool entry!
I love the emptiness, the big images, the voiceover and the music. Nice editing and acting, too. I'm especially impressed since you did this all on your own! Funny story with hiking all alone too, hehe :)
And I also think the story is really cool - but it would be so much cooler as a chapter 2! I suppose I shouldn't say much as we did what we wanted with the characters in our chapter 3 as well, but it just feels like a different story. So I'm slightly uncertain who'se getting my vote!
But really, really good job! Really looking forward to seeing your next chapters - and perhaps competing against you in chapter 6 of this story :)
Ah, forgot to say... it's very cool that the rose petal is now a book with weird symbols in it (is it a real language?). Opens up to more cool stuff :)
Thanks dude, I'd love to share the stage with you guys, you guys really set the bar high with your entry! I figured chapter 4 is rising tension, why not toss in....a whole lot of tension! Go big or go home, I always say :) I will have to post a link to an hd version of the clip....the symbols are from a famous cipher, it'd be interesting if someone could figure out which one ;) The numbers on the opposite side are another famous cipher, though they are out of order.
@killerrobotninja: thanks dude, I've missed you around here! (bryceanderic)
dude you should totaly win its way better than the other submissions.
AHHH!!! BohemianFilmCommune is bryceanderic??? I KNEW you looked familiar! I'm so happy that your back! Sorry for not recognizing you earlier...
for sure brotha, twas me beneath the mask all along!
Congrats!!! A long, long deserved win for you. 5 stories was wayyy too long for you guys to win one. (I REALLY wanted tightly knit to win...)
thanks dudes! I might add, no make up work there mate, a bit of razor to the forehead professional wrestling style gave me all the blood I needed :)
Congrats but tell me you are joking about the razor. Dude... just get some karo syrup, 10 drops of red dye, 2 drops of green and call it a day. I'm starting to get ideas to follow up with but the location is probably going to pose a problem. I'll just have to get more creative. I think I'm going to need to get my hands on a better camera. I'll see what I can do I suppose. Congrats again and dude... seriously just go with the fake blood.
Well played, my friend, and well deserved! I agree, though, Tightly Knit should've gotten this treatment. ;)
Chapter 6 should be pretty rad; I think you stand a substantial shot at sweeping this story!
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(in our defense, there was already a gun established and in use)
thanks mates, I'm excited to see what builds off of this!
@jdemeere, coming from a utilitarian standpoint, your recipe involves purchasing 3 items, then mixing them together to get and end result not necessarily achieving the desired effect, mine involves using one item and the real deal; Its Occam's razor at work!
i don't think judge watch all entries to say all were gun fight and killing. the judge seem funny to me. it first started with gun fight and they voted on that. i don't like. they need better judge.
i do not agree it genre judge say it is too. da vinci code is not genre of this. bad understanding of story.
woot! great job guys! a new rootclip classic.
thanks brah!
Congrats! Looking forward to an even better chapter 6 from you! :)