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Chapter 3 - "The Others"

Voting ended 4/17/2009

Chapter 3 - "The Others"

Submitted 4/13/2009 by jdemeere
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Ben meets Sarah and discovers Mike isn't a typical hitman.

Credits

  • Music and sound - Justin Demeere
  • Sarah - Katy Stennes
  • Mike - Disco
  • Ben - Remi Demeere

Scoring

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Comments

4/13/2009 at noon by rockness_monster

talk about last second

4/13/2009 at 12:17 p.m. by rockness_monster

i like where you went with it killing vampires is fun i went with zombies myself

i think the guy who played mike was kind of dull though you guys should force him to act better next time

and you need more blood

and explosions

and a shoe

4/13/2009 at 12:28 p.m. by JakusB

Its funny you should talk about better acting rockness... =P

I disagree about the more blood/explosions and... shoe? I think less is better, and this clip did a nice job of pushing it in a new direction. Its a very original twist on the story, and I think it could be a very fun storyline to continue. The production values weren't quite as good as "Rose Petal?", but I think the story was a little better. I'm not sure where I'm going to throw my vote...

4/13/2009 at 12:41 p.m. by rockness_monster

jake your so naive all movies are better with more blood and explosions, take a video of a cow eating grass boring right but have the cow step on a land mine and boom cow blood all over a crowd of peta members eating lunch yeah i think im on to something jake do you want to help me make a movie?

4/13/2009 at 2:16 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

A bit disappointed with the drop in production value. I would work on your pacing, the edits could be tightened up quite a bit to get a more natural feel to the conversation, there was a lot of empty space after each individual line. The acting was pretty dry, but I understand we're not working with professionals on these clips. I liked the flashlight idea with the staking of the vampire, a good work around to having to do the whole fake blood thing which could come off pretty cheesy. This would be an interesting one to build off of. It is notable to see two of the submissions implement a girl, you're making it hard on me! ;)

4/13/2009 at 2:19 p.m. by ericAmerica

Fcking Ace mate!!

Hey, who is that fat guy playing Ben?

^__^

4/13/2009 at 3:18 p.m. by rockness_monster

dont call him fat hes obese not fat just kidding dude

4/13/2009 at 4:47 p.m. by elnitter

Yeah, I liked the twist as well - didn't see it coming at all! And it's funny that both of us made a scene with no normal light, just a flashlight in your case and a lighter in ours :)

I like that you've introduced Sarah into the picture, and that she feels so natural there. Acts well, too!

All in all, good job! Would indeed also be a fun storyline to continue :)

4/13/2009 at 5:56 p.m. by FungusRidden

Better cinematography in your last entry, but I like this plot direction better, so it evens out.

Practically speaking, I think you benefitted from not having blood this time, simply because it would've made your production much harder to pull off, for not a substantial gain. Unless it were over the top, almost played for comedic value, and then the entire video would have a new feel to it, I think. I'm also not sure whether your actors would be able to pull something like that off; they seem a bit more serious (almost quirkily monotone) to take it that direction.

...could be interesting to experiment with, though... ;) Good luck!

4/14/2009 at 12:21 p.m. by katy19

Eric- if the next film calls for a skinny jew we'll be sure to call you!!!

4/14/2009 at 1:13 p.m. by jdemeere

@elnitter Funny you mention the light. I actually wrote it to have a lighter but the lighter was too dim and I almost burned my Brother's face off. hehe. So last second flashlight was used. It was in the hall ouside the elevator that had no lights at all. I used it to cover up that it wasn't actually in the elevator. Oh and yes... to cover up the lack of effects and "blood". Wouldn't exactly be proper to have a fountain of blood getting all over everything at the place I work. ;) I like the story but the time I had to execute was a little disappointing. I shot it in one hour and edited in 4. The most difficult part is getting people together to do something. But you work with what you have and just keep pushing through. It was fun and good practice for the 10 hour film festival coming up here in Knoxville. I would say this project took 30 min to write, an hour and 15 min to shoot, and 4 hours to edit. There is plenty of time left for a 10 hour project. ;)

As for the production value I really hindered that with the final encoding. I left it to encode over night and banked that it had worked properly in the morning in time for me to get to work. Well it didn't this time so I had to push out something. I also learned that after encoding it to the specified quality on the site that it seems to degrade even more after it goes through the encoding process at rootclip. This is my second submission realizing just how it looks after the site has encoded it. I now will use Quicktime to encode since WME seems to destroy it too much for this site. The camera looks much better than that. Trial and error! ;) Thanks for the comments all and good luck to everyone as well.

4/17/2009 at 2:20 p.m. by elnitter

@jdemeere It would be really cool to see what you could do if you got people together for a for a few more hours - and as you say you're doing, already writing on the script so you have more time than 30 minutes :) Looking forward to see your next chapter!