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Chapter 2 - "Strictly Business"

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Chapter 2 - "Strictly Business"

Submitted 3/17/2009 by BohemianFilmCommune
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When Ben falls on hard times Mike decides to let him in on his...side project. Unfortunate. For everyone.

Credits

  • Ben - Brudda 1
  • Mike - Brudda 2

Scoring

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Comments

3/17/2009 at 1:57 p.m. by JakusB

Wow you guys were on the ball! The depth of field looked nice, using a 35mm adapter are we? Which, Redrock, Letus, SgBlade, homemade? I liked where you sent the story. Nice cliff hanger. The only real distraction were the lighting and the sound. The whole thing was pretty dark (which would be expected from the adapter) and the audio had a lot of echoes and noise of that sort. But not bad at all for a first submission! (Especially for 20 hours after the story was released. Thats gotta be a new record)

3/17/2009 at 4:33 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P_woZ82ZInk&fmt=22

3/17/2009 at 7:02 p.m. by JoshuaJMills

Good Job and a hell of a turnaround time!

3/18/2009 at 9:13 a.m. by rocknessmonster

yeah you should have taken a few more days then you could have made something really good

3/18/2009 at 4:57 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

no can do, duder, had until 9am the following morning.

3/22/2009 at 12:16 a.m. by FungusRidden

Excellent job! The acting was good and the writing was clever and funny. I agree with Jakus that the sound, which seemed filtered and constantly blotchy (noise reduction causing that?), detracted a little bit, and I think that the lack of contrast (not brightness) leeched on your otherwise-beautiful picture. Definitely some talent and good equipment at work here, though, and I like the story direction. If you win, it'll be a good start to this story!

Best of luck!

3/22/2009 at 1:19 a.m. by davidmoon

My mom used to smoke those skinny little brown cigarettes in the 70's. Brings back fond memories ...

3/22/2009 at 10:03 p.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

thanks dude, it was a last minute decision to make it, would have liked to have my ducks in a row (more lights, less gain, external mics) but figured, eh, I have my camera with me, lets make happen what can happen

3/30/2009 at 1:03 p.m. by MelMorphine

Was decent. Hard to hear though. Should of worked on it a bit longer. Beside that I though it was still a good movie. Stay in character though Mike, you went off track a bit =] Good luck to you guys

3/30/2009 at 1:22 p.m. by catz18

Nice but try to talk loud to help people understand what your saying but good work. Good luck!!!!!!!!!!

3/31/2009 at 12:57 a.m. by jdemeere

The acting was good. I like how the story went but the pace seemed to speed up a little too quickly. Snake showing up so quickly was a little... well just a little quick. The camera angles were descent. My suggestion is the audio levels need to be turned up. The audience can only experience your movie by using two senses, sight and hearing. I would run some tests to see just where your audio drops out and always have your actors in front of that spot when you frame them. That probably means a lot of close up shots but that is okay because most people like close up shots anyway. After all we don't usually tend to have a conversation across the room so why not bring it in close? Keep up the good work!

3/31/2009 at 9:43 a.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

who said Snake is at the door?

3/31/2009 at 9:48 a.m. by jdemeere

True

3/31/2009 at 9:57 a.m. by WAKEupJAKEup

Nice

4/3/2009 at 4:14 a.m. by BohemianFilmCommune

I may also add that how and why Mike is getting this money is still a mystery

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