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Chapter 4 - "Archival Evidence NO. 239B - T. Kingston"

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Chapter 4 - "Archival Evidence NO. 239B - T. Kingston"

Submitted 6/5/2008 by jaytaylorthe1
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The FBI Have Restored Archival Footage of the Infamous Trafficker Tony Kingston, the Evidence was Discovered Hidden in Mr. Kingston's Home After His Assassination. It's Been Restored to the Best of The FBI's Ability, for Your Viewing Pleasure.

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Comments

6/5/2008 at 10:43 a.m. by ing

cloverfield much? :P

6/5/2008 at 10:47 a.m. by jaytaylorthe1

What can I say, I got inspired.

6/5/2008 at 2:14 p.m. by davidmoon

Oh please ... let Santa be Joe Votero in the next chapter!!! "Ho, ho, ho ... Dirtbag!"

6/5/2008 at 3:06 p.m. by looch

Tickle torture?!! That's totally worse than getting your fingernails pulled out. LOL!

I was thinking, though...does this one really make sense to anyone else? I mean...is this supposed to be a video tape of the shed scene that was released from the FBI years later or something? How could this continue from here? Does the whole story pan out on FBI tapes? IDK?!

It kind of takes the story WAY out of place, IMHO. It's definitely creative. Don't get me wrong, I think you guys did a great job...the cut scenes and how you laid the whole thing out was very interesting, but it is confusing to me how this could fit into the story. Just my .02 cents.

6/5/2008 at 3:12 p.m. by ing

i totally agree with looch on this one. i absolutely love the whole cloverfield idea, and I think you handled it quite well (and i also think this is a stronger submission than your last one, so good job!). however, i'm not quite sure how it would fit into the overall scheme of things, so i'm a bit hesitant towards this one.

6/5/2008 at 3:54 p.m. by davidmoon

I like that the story twists and turns, and how Santa is reintroduced. I see a lot of creative possibilities in future clips utilizing this style, and sensibly leaving it if necessary.

6/5/2008 at 4:07 p.m. by looch

Leaps and bounds better than their chapter 3 submission. I agree, ing.

I think these guys really have a talent and could do really well, but I'm not feeling it with this one. It's just a little hard to follow for me.

6/5/2008 at 4:09 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

Wow, what happened between the chapters? This is SO much better than your last clip, I'm impressed!

Good job man.

6/5/2008 at 4:22 p.m. by FungusRidden

Hands down, this entry is much, MUCH stronger! You guys pulled off the Cloverfield style well; the reintroduction of Santa was unexpected and funny! I actually like the idea of his reappearance a lot, because he's quite forgettable after that split second in Chapter 2.

I am a little confused by where the story is starting and where Chapter 5 would begin. I suppose teams get a choice on Chapter 5, whether to continue following the flashback, or to return to the "present" (or shall we say, "less passed past") and follow the other video Scott recorded of himself after the Santa incident took place. It's not overly tricky, but does divert from the narrative flavor of the past entries. Not that shaking things up is always a bad thing. ;)

Again, great job! Keep up the good work!

6/5/2008 at 6:46 p.m. by dogfan1

april 20th, i get it. and more subtle than a bowl....nice!

6/5/2008 at 6:56 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1
6/5/2008 at 6:56 p.m. by filmdude19

not only is this much better than your previous entry, but i think its the best chapter 4 entry. well done!

6/5/2008 at 6:57 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1
6/5/2008 at 7:08 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

Thank you for all the compliments, it means a lot to me and my actors. I do hold Cloverfield close to my heart but that's not actually what inspired me. I have always been a big fan of ' The Blair Witch Project' It blew my mind as a child and it has always stuck with me

Please allow me to explain about chapter three; we only had access to the set one day before the clips were due. Immediatly after filming I went to my night job and then only had a few hours to edit the next morning before noon. Now DON"T get me wrong, I'm not complaining; just explaining.

Root Clip screwed me over a little bit; if you notice there is no summer of my clip underneath the video. The summery explained why the FBI had all this video. I have retyped it below, I hope it makes more sense now. DARN YOU ROOTCLIP!!

" The Following Archival Footage Was Discovered Hidden In The Home Of Notorious Trafficker Tony Kingston, After His Brutal Assassination In The Year 2033. The FBI Has Finally Released This Historic Beginning Of The Worlds Most Deadly Criminal Duo Known To Date. "

6/5/2008 at 7:11 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

Thanks DogFan1. I was hoping you or JesusLovesMe would notice.

Sorry for making the board a little messy, maybe it's not RootClip's fault but my comps. Sometimes my post don't show up??

6/5/2008 at 7:14 p.m. by cindyfischer

Well Done. This one stands out from the others.

6/5/2008 at 7:22 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

Argh why does everyone have santa costumes :p

6/5/2008 at 7:29 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

I just got 3 votes and immediately afterwards he got 4. I'm getting this feeling in my stomach that, I have already lost.

6/5/2008 at 7:36 p.m. by ing

eh, you still got like 3 and a half days left dude, don't fret it. you guys have been keeping close to each others numbers all day, and i have a feeling that if they had the votes to get a huge lead, then they'd probably already have it. they probably wasted all their publicity powers on chapter 3!

6/5/2008 at 8:42 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

ing, I just didn't even publicize for this one, that's probably why the numbers are close

jaytaylor, don't fret, the votes are probably just going up much more naturally this time, since I haven't even said anything to get votes this time, believe it or not (aside from my sisters of course, I guess they don't count, right haha)

6/6/2008 at 7:36 a.m. by jaytaylorthe1

Dear Killerrobotninja,

Why no submission?

6/6/2008 at 9:21 a.m. by killerrobotninja

I just can't justify putting so much time and energy into something, when I can't compete with the "marketing".

JTthe1, leaps and bounds indeed! I really hope next cycle has a panel of judges, and I hope we all keep getting better.

My only critique is a sarcastic one: a backstory? you can't do that! you have to have all the characters! Anything interesting that doesn't invove the three guys is off limits! How in the world will the story move forward if you take a detour from the generic and obvious story everyone already has in their heads?

But seriously, if Thrown Together wins, I'll put my hangups aside and play next round. I have a freakin sweet idea to continue that one!

6/6/2008 at 9:42 a.m. by davidmoon

I still think that a blind vote tally should be incorporated in the next contest.

6/6/2008 at 10:07 a.m. by davidmoon

I don't like the panel idea. It would completely stall community growth, and this community needs wings if there's a possibility of future contests where marketing is not the deciding factor in who wins. I believe the solution now is to put proper security in place to keep people from cheating, or providing loopholes for unfair advantages.

A judged competition doesn't fit this contest format, IMHO.

6/6/2008 at 11:15 a.m. by allen

I fixed the description for you. Sorry about that. It seems every now and again our system is eating any text that has an apostrophe in it when I cut and paste. It was there, just not showing up. I replaced the apostrophes, and all is well.

6/6/2008 at 11:31 a.m. by funkalicious

hot damn that's some fine filmmaking. i especially like the guy in the glasses. he looks like the type who can play guitar really well but took a break from music school to help his good buddy jay make a movie late at night in a lightning storm by being tied up for hours and having water thrown on him. and i like that in an actor

6/6/2008 at 12:07 p.m. by vote082

dude you already have 5 times the votes of your last submission "What Gives?" (joe votero style)

6/6/2008 at 12:07 p.m. by vote082

dirtbag!

6/6/2008 at 1:18 p.m. by vote082

that wasn't accusatory or anything... just in case people read it that way.

6/6/2008 at 2:13 p.m. by looch

@vote082 we understand...dirtbag!! LOL!

6/6/2008 at 2:39 p.m. by mimaw

hilarious -- i loved it. still giggling.

6/6/2008 at 5:11 p.m. by looch

@SomethingsAwry in regards to your comment about "everyone having santa costumes", me thinks jaytaylorthe1 is somehow linked in with the HungryMother crew.

Of course, this is just a conspiracy theory...or is it?

6/6/2008 at 9:37 p.m. by FungusRidden

If somebody REALLY wants to screw with the other teams, they'll throw a guy in a chicken suit into the story and force everyone to come up with THAT for their chapters... ;)

Thankfully, it looks like Santa will be the trickiest costume anyone needs to find...

6/6/2008 at 10:34 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

Hey looch!

That's not funny.

6/7/2008 at 1:59 a.m. by Jade_B

well done letter.

6/8/2008 at 4:48 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

I'm back ;)

No way jaytaylorthe1 is linked to hungrymother, he makes movies that are actually watchable :D

6/8/2008 at 4:49 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

jaytaylor does (that was sort of vague)

6/8/2008 at 5:03 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

Thank you for the defense SomeThingsAwry, I wouldn't want any lawyers involved. (I don't have one)

6/8/2008 at 5:09 p.m. by fiercedeityys

i suggest Phoenix Wright as a lawyer. you never lose if he's your defense! :D

6/8/2008 at 5:26 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

I hear he's quite the Ace Attorney!

6/8/2008 at 5:36 p.m. by tattletale

Nice torture techniques! Let me guess it's gonna be the tooth fairy under the santa outfit? :)

6/8/2008 at 5:59 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

I think the most obvious choice would be Robert Applecroft. but I think a new unique character who gets killed by the end of the clip could be cool as well. But the Tooth Fairy did cross my mind, I asked but she declined my offer to participate...

6/8/2008 at 6:12 p.m. by Radar

Santa is such a Bad @$$!!!

6/8/2008 at 6:15 p.m. by fiercedeityys

the most obvious choice would be Robert, but I don't think it'd fit at all considering in Ch. 2 they see Santa, and then like 2 seconds later Robert sees them...just wouldn't make too much sense in the long run.

6/8/2008 at 11:26 p.m. by Fink

wow! 84 to 84. I haven't seen a contest this close since the democratic primaries! I will say that these are both good videos, but this one inspires more change than our opposing candidate candidate. This is change we can believe in!

6/8/2008 at 11:31 p.m. by Fink

not to mention, like the clintons have already ruled the presidency, FungusRidden has already ruled the last chapter. i promise this is the last ridiculous parallel to politics that i will make

6/8/2008 at 11:52 p.m. by FungusRidden

We're also unnaturally disgruntled about everything. That's another parallel.

(kidding) ;)

6/8/2008 at 11:55 p.m. by Fink

well no matter what, the actor playing scott is incredibly attractive and probably the best actor since patrick swayze!

6/9/2008 at 1:19 a.m. by FungusRidden

Thanks, Fink, I'll pass that along to him. I'm sure he'll be pleased to hear such stunning reviews. :)

6/9/2008 at 2:48 a.m. by FungusRidden

Oh... I thought that comment was on our video... :<

Well, I can still pass that along, but I probably don't need to. XD He's certainly talented, though.

6/9/2008 at 2:40 p.m. by FungusRidden

Hey, great job! You worked hard and made an awesome entry. It was a good race to the finish, and there's so many ways to take the story where you left off! So, thanks for giving us a terrific piece of entertainment. :)

We'll meet again in Round 5, and now also in Round 6! It should be exciting! :3

6/9/2008 at 2:46 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

Well, I fulfilled my side of the bargain, and was prepared to take a loss, seeing as how I wasn't about to rally any votes (93 votes as compared to 180+, I hope you can see that I didn't work for this at all), but I'm pleased to see my video still received quite a fair number of votes.

Congrats, and thanks for a fun round.

6/9/2008 at 3:08 p.m. by jaytaylorthe1

Your welcome. Let the games begin..............................AGAIN!

6/20/2008 at 6:28 p.m. by charliechaplin

I just realized how intense your foot tickling method is. Very impressive...