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Chapter 2 - "Earth Girls Are Cheesy"

Voting ended 1/16/2009

Chapter 2 - "Earth Girls Are Cheesy"

Submitted 1/12/2009 by rorymcfly
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While her boyfriend goes on a quest for an elusive and rare item, Lainey and the Alien form a bond.

Credits

  • Boyfriend - Johnny Weathers
  • Lainey - A.P. Koz
  • Alien - Tagg Sledge
  • Shot & Cut - Rory Kelleher
  • Catering - Tex

Scoring

Weighted Community Vote Weighted Judges' Vote Total Score
10.7%
+
20.0%
=
30.7%

Judges' Votes

Paul Izbicki | Producer and Director

Most effort, best flow, most creative, keeps the action going, except for the useless exterior dialogue (didn't seemingly go anywhere-dilly dally, Mary Poppins refs). Like to see more effort at lighting from all the submissions-even high power flashlights or headlights reflected off foam core would help in dark exteriors. Nice cut-aways, and a good traditional cliff-hanger ending got my vote.


Karen Daniel | Executive Producer/Principal

I liked how you moved the story along, and I love how Lainey bonded and started confessing her boyfriend troubles to the Alien - that was funny. Nice location shooting, and cutting between the action. Great effect from the gun too. Next time, finesse the music just a bit better, but overall very nice work.



Comments

1/12/2009 at 9:31 a.m. by rocknessmonster

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1/12/2009 at 11:38 a.m. by clearlyjamie

This one is definately my favorite! Great job!

1/12/2009 at 12:40 p.m. by muscleman

You definitely had it in the actress! But the story didn't really flow well, it jumped around. But I like the special effect on the laser gun, but then again you're using a weapon.

1/12/2009 at 2:24 p.m. by rorymcfly

It didn't say don't use a weapon. It just said don't get a weapon from the trunk.

1/12/2009 at 2:58 p.m. by jbooth41

Alien needs to learn the boob grab.

1/12/2009 at 5:12 p.m. by FungusRidden

Nabbing access to a location like that (Chuck Cheese's?) is pretty awesome, and some of the dialogue (improvised?) was amusing. You're a bit reliant on it, though, and I don't think you need to be. Experiment with your angles a bit more (pouring the tea was a nice one) and test out some screenplay ideas and I think you'll have a huge jump in professionalism.

Otherwise, strong entry with some good elements in it. Best of luck!

1/12/2009 at 10:15 p.m. by diirwin

COOL VIDEO! LOVED THE SKEE-BALL SCENE!

1/13/2009 at 12:15 a.m. by DJK

The BEST! ...This video made me want more! ...in a suspenseful yet fun and humorous kind of way similar to that of Chapter 1...it flowed nicely. Good acting too!

1/13/2009 at 12:25 a.m. by Lauracella

WhooHoooo....great fun!

1/13/2009 at 1:35 a.m. by raingreen

WOOOHOOO! So did you have to finish the crown before you used the bag? OM NOMM NOMM!

1/13/2009 at 7:56 a.m. by Rich_Cline

The plotting feels somewhat random. But it's nicely shot and edited, with some good comedy dialogue.

1/13/2009 at 8:10 a.m. by tomkoz

Can't wait for chapter 3!

1/13/2009 at 3:32 p.m. by Mrmagoofan

Lol that was really funny. Was that Jango Fett's gun? This was pretty good.

1/13/2009 at 4:36 p.m. by FreakBeatlesManiac

Hahaha, an arcade...

1/13/2009 at 8:04 p.m. by micco6

Jajaja, this one was good. Good job guys.

1/13/2009 at 8:47 p.m. by ateam

Good job. I can't wait for more. However, a little bummed that I could not be a extra in this. I see that this was probably shot in Seattle . How do I sign up :)

1/13/2009 at 9:17 p.m. by pot

by far the most creative and original. what would have been really funny if the alien stole some food for his stoke. maybe chicken wings?

1/13/2009 at 9:34 p.m. by ateam

OH , that is a great idea !!! hot plates......

1/13/2009 at 10:07 p.m. by GLE

WOW. these cats are creative. can't wait for chapter 3 submission. maybe the laser will do something to their FACE.

1/14/2009 at 12:41 p.m. by kara_ayn

This made me LOL! What did she put in that tea?

1/14/2009 at 5:13 p.m. by Rain

Very creative you guys ROCK!

1/14/2009 at 5:33 p.m. by xdetah

Definitely needs more chicken wings.

1/14/2009 at 5:38 p.m. by dta206

You should shoot the next scene in Pennsylvania or Minnesota. Don't forget the wings.

1/14/2009 at 5:40 p.m. by dta_aa

Tagg Sledge is the man. You met the man?

1/14/2009 at 5:52 p.m. by kozamy

Kara_ayn.... the first 2 things i spotted; redbull and whiskey!

1/14/2009 at 6:50 p.m. by RockstarProductions

WTF did that guy shoot out of his gun? Rainbow? I'm surprised this was runner up right now. Epic failure.

1/14/2009 at 8:15 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

RockstarProductions, I eagerly await your submission that you promised us oh so long ago.

1/14/2009 at 8:21 p.m. by 3GKAYAKGUIDES

can't understand why drunk jim is in the lead. maybe all his voters were DRUNK! the cheese ROCKS!

1/14/2009 at 9:11 p.m. by juntabird

Very creative...leaves me wanting more!

1/15/2009 at 12:09 a.m. by libby

hilarious! need to make skeeball death ray on board signs

1/15/2009 at 12:14 p.m. by Longreach

Jim's Been Drinking Again is in the lead because of the better writing, cinematography, editing, and composition. (It also helps that it was created by two regulars on rootclip who each have a huge fan base...)

1/15/2009 at 2:46 p.m. by FungusRidden

And also, because all our voters are drunk.

1/15/2009 at 4:30 p.m. by 3GKAYAKGUIDES

Jim has good cinematography and editing, yes. But come on, who wrote this? Jim's has ZERO creativity.

1/15/2009 at 7:48 p.m. by SomethingsAwry

ok lol

1/16/2009 at 5:04 a.m. by CarnivorousFilms

I really liked the plot in this one the best, but I had to go with "Jim's Been Drinking Again". I felt it was more skillfully shot, and edited. Be more mindful of your camera angles and overall composition, and you'll definitely get my vote. Nice job though.

1/16/2009 at 10:35 a.m. by pasjns

Good job!!!

1/16/2009 at 12:03 p.m. by JakusRidden

Nice job guys, hope you'll be back in chapter 3!

1/18/2009 at 8:16 p.m. by judyj

This was my favorite... really liked the boyfriend bashing. Nice twist.

1/23/2009 at 2:20 a.m. by TheBigKlosowski

This was the best of the bunch in my opinion. Funny, well shot, and a super clever concept.